Ok so this is as weird for me as it is for you, forgive the formatting issues, I’m using a script program and copy and pasting from it is like the word equivalent of the fly.
So it looks like ass but it gives you the general feel for it which is all that matters. Had some problems with it as I said, I started with an idea in my head and then rereading the book I liked his opening a lot more and I thought I could a lot with that that was way more subtle and would deliver more worldbuilding in the first five minutes than what I had originally sketched out.
But then pain in the ass of asses for some reason this damn program didn’t save the last five pages despite having an auto save function. So I spent yesterday reconstructing it from notes and memory, which is so disheartening, really makes you just wanna give up.
I’m almost back to where I was and if I keep pace, I should have it done within a month, maybe two.
So far it’s going really well, I think I’m blending the movie and the book in a really organic way. I’m really enjoying, I should be doing prose but this is just a fun little experiment I wanted to try, it’s not like I have anywhere in particular to send it, I’ll probably just sit on it. I’m really just killing time until all the rejections come rolling in for Diana haha. Then I can restrategize because I know that book has what it takes to hook an agent if the chick that wrote fifty shades can get an agent, that book can get an agent.
I just need to repackage it a little.
Busy tomorrow so I might do a poem but I saw this utterly beautiful movie last night called ‘Leave no trace’ where Ben Foster plays this military vet with ptsd who is living off the grid with his daughter and it was just the most touching story ever and it really spoke to me. Beautifully shot and acted, I want to do a review but it just felt so personal, there was so much that touched me personally in that film. It left me feeling so sad.
But then of course I put on some american horror story season 6 and did a super heavy chest day and that made me feel better but it stays with me still. It was about this broken guy who couldn’t live in society dragging his daughter to live in the woods. And she’s pulled on one side by him and the other by being a normal girl who wants friends and to be around people and the ending is just so sad. Because they want to be together so badly but they just cant. I get the feels even thinking about it.
Definitely worth a watch.
It’s a slow movie, where nothing really happens but its one of those movies that holds your attention anyway.
It was based on a book too so that’s more inspiration I guess, not that I think I’m capable of writing something so moving.
Anyway now realising I have no image for this and I have to go make a folder for one brb haha.
Ok there we go.
See you…
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FADE IN:
Inter title:
“Come on, you apes! You wanna live forever?”
EXT. Staging area. Day
MI troops are lined up in formation as an overlay is laid over the top as an
informerial
propaganda ad for the mobile infantry.
Soldier 1
I’m doing my part!
SolDIER 2
I’m doing my part!
A shino dog in full MI regalia barks at the screen and his barks are translated a subtitles.
MI Doge
I’m doing my part!
The MI troops all laugh jovially.
Voice over
They’re doing their part, are you doing yours? Join the mobile infantry today! Remember, service guarantees citizenship! Sign up today!
ExT. Skinny homeworld. Night
VOICE OVER
Skinny homeworld zeta k
VOICE OVER (CONT’D)
After years of aggression, the alien threat on zeta k has been pacified.
An MI troop violently herds a family of innocuous skinny aliens into an enclosure. When he notices he’s being filmed he smiles at the camera and gives a cheesy thumbs up
VOICE OVER (CONT’D)
All thanks to the guys and girls in the mobile infrantry, good work trooper!
VOICE OVER (CONT’D)
Would you like to know more?
Ext. Outside the skymarshall’s office. Day
A group of protestors are picketing the skymarshall’s office with signs complaining about brutality and various causes. “Sky man bad!” Protesting the fascist nature of the government.
VOICE OVER
Protests broke out today outside the Sky Marshall’s office.
VoICE OVER (CONT’D)
Unhappy non-citizens whining about their sorry lot.
The military police open fire on the protestors.
VOICE OVER (CONT’D)
Nice try non-citizen!
VOICE OVER (
CONT’D
)
Democracy was last century, only citizens can vote, become a citizen today and join the mobile infantry.
VOICE OVER (
CONT’D
)
Do your part for a better tomorrow! Service guarantees citizenship!
INT. ROGER YOUNG SPACE SHIP. Drop room
All cap troopers are strapped in ready to drop.
DIZ
and JENKINS watch RICO as he sits placidly shaking in his pod.
JENKINS
All the injections and hypnotic suggestion in the world and your boy is still shaking like a leaf.
DIZZY
That’s Johnny Rico you’re talking about.
JENKINS
Well Johnny Rico looks like he’s about to
shit
his pants
haha
.
DIZZY
Johnny isn’t afraid of nothing.
JENKINS
Then why’s he shaking like a virgin on prom night?
DIZZY
It’s not fear… it’s like… have you been to a race back on Terra? You get close enough you can see the trembling of a race horse about to leave the starting gate… Johnny
aint afraid of nothing.
The platoon leader JELLY walks up and down the platoon for an inspection of their gear. He stops at JENKINS and presses his vitals button on his belt.
JELLY
Fall out!
JENKINS
But
sarge
it’s just a cold! Doc said…
JELLY
Doc
aint
making your drop! Fall out!
JENKINS is forced to leave the pod bay looking saddened and angry.
JELLY looks over the remaining squad
JeLLY (
CONT’D
)
What a gang of apes!
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Remember! We can spare you but not that fancy
shit
you’re carrying. No heroes in this outfit, you got a job you do it you show up for retrieval on the bounce get me?
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Your’re
sposed
to know the plan but some of you
aint
got minds to hypnotize. This is just a raid, not a battle, a demonstration of force, we want them to know we could destroy their whole
goddamn
planet but we didn’t.
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Take no prisoners but kill only when you have to and don’t come back with any unloaded bombs. Command wants the whole are we hit flattened.
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
The lieutenant told me before he bought it that he’d have his eye on you.
Rasczak’s
roughnecks have got a reputation to uphold!
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Five minutes padre.
JELLY looks over at the squad chaplain who is ready for the drop like an ordinary mi, some men fall out to kneel in front of MIGLIACCIO.
MIGLIACCIO
JOHNNY RICO!
RICO
YEAH?
MIGLIACCIO
Anything you wanna say to god in case you buy the farm?
RICO
Tell him I’ll see him out there.
JeLLY
Tenn
… Shut!
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Platoon!
MIGLIACCIO
Section!
JOHNSON
Section!
JELLY
By sections – port and starboard – prepare for drop.
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Section! Man your capsules! Move!
The cap troopers are slowly enclosed in their drop capsules and now voices can be heard through the radios in their headsets as they prepare to drop.
JELLY (
CONT’D
)
Bridge!
Rasczaks
roughnecks… ready for drop!
Captain
deladrier
Seventeen seconds Lieutenant!
CAPTAIN
deladrier
(
CONT’D
)
Good luck, boys!
CAPTAIN
deladrier
(
CONT’D
)
Brace yourselves five seconds!
The capsule troops wait in silence and darkness until launch, tightly wrapped in their pods
Then suddenly they’re violently ejected into space as the corvette class warship the Roger Young fires them onto the planet they’re
orbitting
like an artillery gun.
But there’s a problem with Rico’s pod, a misfire, a decoy pod collides with his pod and he’s knocked off course.
DiZZY
RICO!
Darkly Dreaming Demographic. 
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